My poem is about holding people back. I held back a past love, and therefore, I lost him.

But even though we lose someone, it doesn't mean they can't be in our thoughts.

This poem originally was published in Sad Poems - Sad Love Poems

Thinking
Thinking. Can't stop thinking.
Think of you. This. That. That Life. That day.
That dream was mine.
A utopian dream.

Your aura; struck me like lightning to a tree.
Pointy, like a star, you shone.
So bright, yet not shining as a star would,
But as apparent as white chalk on a blackboard.
You would not show off like a star.
Yet you did burn so hot, so fiercely, so explosively -
you were a star in my eyes.

But like all stars, you died.
That gas was gone.
No pull between us.
The atmosphere was dry
and I began to choke.
I was taken from my star - like a child being taken from its poor,
drunken mother - I did not know what was happening.
Dazed. Confused. Without true reality, I there sat.
Wondering.

The end of my world had only just begun, with yours beginning.
59 Visitor Comments (from the Voting form)
  • himanshu
    i love this poem and hats off to author
  • Jodi-ann
    beautiful and very creative. i am actually a song writer(well just as a hobby) and just by reading that i had the perfect song. very creative
  • Miller
    This poem reflects exactly how i am feeling right now. I am 17 and in a 2year relationship. I just feel like our relationship has lost it's pull. Her and her family are moving to austrailia sometime soon and I just feel like my star is fading away. Thankz 4 your poem, it's really moving im just glad that somepeople have the gift to use words to such an affect whereas i cannot :)
  • Monica
    I LOVE YOUR POME IT IS SO SAD AND THAT POME THAT YOU HAVE MAKE ME CRY BECASE SOME ONE THAT I LOVE SOME MUCH AND HE MAD ME CRY AND DO SOME BAD THANG TO ME I NOT OVER HIM AND I WILL NAVE BE OVER HIM BECASE I LOVE HIM SO MUCH
  • Sheryl
    Thinking is my speciality!
  • Josh
    so sad so beautiful
  • jack
    great. great poem. i really like it.
  • Rhianon
    This Poem has touched me like no other it is so deep i shed a tear. for anyone to write like that you know that it come from the heart feeling from the soul good luck in your future
  • Mitch
    Very Nice poem and I Agree Jospeh. i know you feel. i am still going throug with the same prob. love hurts. and its pain,.
  • Andrea
    Hey HG, hows it going. this is pretty crazy that i found ur poem online. It's good. I like it.
  • Sandra
    I Love Your Poem, I really did. i Remember when this had happening to me. Great And LOVE IT???
  • Nick
    . It says everything.
  • vicky
    i really like this poem. it totaly relates to me when i found out my star liked someone else. write some more!
  • Tae
    the words just flowed together, i thought it was great, the metaphores realy made me feel like whoever it was that hurt you had just hurt me i felt mad and sad at the same time going through some of the same things i loved it
  • nadi
    it was interesting.
  • Mckenzie
    this poemreally toched my hart this is the best one yet.
  • fathmath
    it's a very touching and romantic poem. i love it. you are so good at writing poems.
  • kasi
    i loved this poem this i think would have to be one ofthe best poems on this website i loved it it was inspiering and made my eyes open up to a whole different world thinking wow this person has a lot more pain than i do i love the poem and i hope others ill apritiate it as much as i do! :)
  • Joseph
    This is a fantastic poem. It's exactly how I feel. My life ended when my former loves began. I miss her So much even though it's been so long since I've seen or talked to her. Anyway Great poem 10 out of 10. It's So sad how two people can be in love, and then once it ends one person acts like they weren't in love at all. Absolutely crushing to a persons' soul. Sorry for the babaling.
  • Kate
    Woa. definitly struck deep with me
  • Charish
    I really loved that poem
  • Brian
    This is truly my situation perhaps even more literally than you could have known in it's creation. But I am coming to the realization that my lover of 3 years has a boyfriend and I am on the way out. I've also learned that my Hiv disease has become more agressive and that I may be looking at the inevitable decline of my health and that I will likely slide on downwards on my ownm, alone. Meanwhike he is too consumed in the heat of the biginnings of his new situation to even see the writing on the wall. Thank you for writing it!
  • Patricia
    Extreemly good! ahhh. because it shows the heart!
  • rachael
    this poem touched my heart and made me realize that i have done stupid things for somebody that does not love me so i will not waste my time no longer
  • RIVA
    I vite for this poem top 10 it was the best
  • yeraldine
    I love this poem. It reminds me of the big fight that me a one of my best guy friends had. I wish we would talk again
  • Lauren
    I love this poem. It makes me think of things I just went through. and It hurts my heart but it opens my eyes and relates to my situation and brings me back and gives me another chance to analyze it. thank you so much 4 writing a poem like this.
  • ashley
    This poem touched me in ways words can't even imagin because I am 15 yrs old and 3 days befor I turned 15 my boyfriend died in a car accident and my word is ending and I dodn't know how to move on. and I go out on whoever trys to talk about it, and it gets really bad at night when I'm lying in bed and that's all I can think about. your poem was great it was better than any one I've ever read!
  • Florian
    Hi I'm flo from Germany. and I voted for this poem because I meet a girl for several years and we got a lot in common. I liked her and she liked me. But after a few of moths I did a stupid mistake. I will never see her again (she still alive, don't worry). And I fell like the person who is left alone in life. And I think my story is reflected in this poem. sorry for my bad english. :)
  • Lisa
    it moved me. very nice. deep
  • Lou
    The verse "your aura; struck me like lightening to a tree" was incredible, the intensity, I'll never forget that verse.
  • Bethany
    this poem was one of those poems that are seldome found. Those rare words that reach down into your soul and gives you a feeling you can only get from a poem such as this. Thank you.
  • karina
    the poem was very nice and sad
  • sharon
    i think this poem is awesome. it really touched me.
  • Antonis
    It is a wonderful poem. It reminds me how painful it is to lose someone and know that you'll probably never see her again.
  • Claire
    this was how i felt when he left me. reading this made me know that i'm not alone. thank you.
  • Jan
    The idea and theme is very nice
  • Mike
    I really did like this poem, it reminded me of someone. Thanks.
  • Jewel
    It touched my heart in a way i can describe though you said how i felt in your poem about what is going on in my life thank you
  • laura
    The poem is written very well. It reminds me of a past experience and it states exactly how i felt and exactly the same situation.
  • mel114
    this poem is full of emotions and they are truly told/shown
  • LORENA
    I JUST LOVE YOUR POEM MAKES ME THINK AND REMEMBER WHAT MY LOVE FOR SOMEONE DID.
  • Brian
    I felt the pain of loss and longing in this. sometimes the switch is stuck on.
  • sonia
    this poem is really good because people feel like that some times when there sad.
  • mimi
    its just amazing how she`d written such a poem.... you are a relly gifted heart-expresser! nice one! ope to know you more!
  • Rafia
    This is really a great poem, I love it, keep writing.
  • Nadine
    I liked your poem a lot, cause i cant either stop thinking. thinking about what had happend about what could happen too many thinks are on my mind. He is just telling me that he needs a space and after that it all will be fine as it was before. I cant stop thinking.(sorry for mistakes im german)
  • Bob
    nice poem, I like the pace of it
  • Chrissy
    Your imagination preceeds you, yet I feel that the 2nd verse of this poem could go into another direction, but ending up with the same last line.
  • Angel
    beautiful poem. i can relate to it alot, and i never stop thinking. you have a great talent. keep writting, and i'll keep reading them. good luck for the future!
  • Snipe
    Its great. Youve got talent. I just got out of a realtionship and it helped. It gave me some things to think about.
  • Shannon
    Your poem is very touching to me, especially your last line.
  • jose
    I really like your poem. It,s like you know the pain i have innside me. Thank you.
  • Jenny
    I find this poem very sweet. I mean, it expresses alot of emotions people actually feel. i know this because i gone through this. well that's all i've got to say.
  • Karen
    Really great comment. The imagery, i could almost imagine how she felt. Keep it up.
  • amber
    ur poem touched me and made me think of some things that im going through.
  • July
    You're great. I have felt this before.
  • sara
    this peom is exactly what happened between me and my ex boyfriend.it really hit hard to my heart
  • sundy
    I am having the same feeling about this poem and it make me feel like the person was talking about my feelings.

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