#42 The Robot
There are so many people who cannot show emotions and feelings very easily. Many times they are misinterpreted as being cold or unfeeling and pay the consequences when, all the while, they just want to be open and expressive like everyone else.
They just can't.
This poem originally was published in Love Poems
The Robot
Upon the stairway of despair, Complete with broken love affairs And promises that never came, But faded with a touch of shame, A pretty girl with golden hair And innocence so sadly rare, Strove to keep her head above A way of life devoid of love. Feeling pinned against Life's wall, She chanced upon a robot tall And said, "Please come and share with me Whatever Fate has deemed to be. I'm through with love, done with chances Spirit crushed by past romances, Just be a friend in word and deed. That's all that I shall ever need." "There's not too much from me to learn," Remarked the robot, in return. "Emotions do not form a part of my cold, solid-steel heart. Whatever maker fashioned me Did not permit my circuitry Responsiveness to love or pain - Your thoughts for me would be in vain." "No matter", spoke the maid. "No more Do I wish passion to explore. Be someone I can come home to When my exhausting day is through. Count yourself a well-worn shoe - A friend that I can slip into . . . Protection from a stone cold floor . . . For this I ask and nothing more." Agreement made, he took her hand And lived the life that she had planned, Always willing, not demanding, Aiding her with understanding He made her smile with humorous wit (As his restrictions would permit) And, bit by bit, she came to feel That he was more than iron and steel. "I love you, robot", she at last Replied when several months had passed. "You're strength and quiet dignity Have brought a wondrous change in me. No more do I feel all alone, And pray you must be flesh and bone. Deep-set emotions you MUST feel Within that outer coat of steel!" "If I were able, I would say I'm sorry I was made this way But my design and programmation Does not provide for that creation Of feelings normal men may feel That were not born of iron and steel. I told you all this once before. You have no right expecting more." "Go, then!" cried she. "I will not live Beside a fiend who cannot give! Though I be battered by misuse, Misguided trust and strong abuse, At least the men I chose were real And had the power to love and feel. Of all the lovers I recall, You are the cruelest one of all!" The robot, indestructible, Continues freely and at will. Emotionless, apparently, But, bearing closer scrutiny, One can see a small tear streak Down that cold, metallic cheek As I reflect upon my life . . . That lovely lady was my wife. The robot, of course, was me. |
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Michael Mack
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349 Visitor Comments (from the Voting form)
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sunitaMy mother is a cold and hard woman. I have hated her all my life because of her coldness. However, after reading this poem, I started to ponder, what if. Amidst my tears, I think I may have made a mistake all my life. Please continue to write.
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ritzelleI love this poem. i even post this to my blog!
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sarahThis poem really touched me - very sad but beautiful x
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LorraineA lot of truth packed into this poem.
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willsimply amazing. well constructed and touching i love it
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AMBERSELF AWARENESS IS THE FIRST STEP TO CREATING A LIFE LONG CHANGE IN BEHAVIOR. IT IS DIFFICULT FOR ANYONE TO BE HONEST ABOUT WHO THEY ARE EXPOSING WEAKNESSES AND FAULTS WITHOUT STRAYING AWAY FROM THE TRUTH ABOUT WHO THEY ARE. THIS IS A GREAT POEM THE BEST IVE READ OR HEARD IN A LONG, LONG TIME. AMBER
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Aminyou are just fantastic
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AMELIAi really like this poem whoever wrote it is a very unique thinker
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michalyni loved this poem its from the heart and so seriele for feelings are so often unreal and painless for one to express
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Adrianai love this poem. ive been in a relationship with a few guys who just dont show much emotion towards me. and it kinda hurts in ways but this poem was absolutley amazing. i never thought about a man so insensitive like that. The other crazy thing is i went out with a guy named Michael Mack and he didnt show much emotion eithor and this poem made me kind of giggle of all the thoughts running through my mind when i saw who it was written by cause of the experiance i had with a guy named Michael Mack. i cant really explain it, but i absolutely love this poem!
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AshleyMichael-- your poem was amazing. so creative and the words run off the page! you are a great writer and i would love to read more of your poetry. the way you write is so heartfelt and real, you can describe feelings that people have, that they themself cant. thank you for sharing your poem! i truly truly enjoyed every word!
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lilii liked the poem so much especially the last part. its so touching and i want to tell you to proceed and never stop.
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jenniferOMG. i luv this poem. i wish my poems were this good! so sad too.
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JennThis is an amazing poem! I am sure it has created much feelings for many! Thank you!
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kalindiAll i have to say is WOW! this is a realllllly good poem. i really liked it. you are talented and theres is no dought about it.
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chainneythe robot reminds me of my son's father that I've been dating fir 5 1/2 years
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rebeccawow that is more than emotional. i think it could have discribed more than 100 people's lives! wow is that how every man feels when they truely love someone but do not know? or are scared?
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jazlinomg great poem it made my eyes watery bravo
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NicoleWow! Amazingly well-written. I really enjoy this site and the stories the poems tell. This is truly one of the best writings I have ever read. So many people (guys and ladies) have that love but do not know how to express it. Maybe this will help. Thank you for sharing.
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KassandraI love it.
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PATRICIAI REALLY LOVE THIS POEM. I COMPLETELY RELATE TO IT IN A WOMAN'S SENCE. I AM THE ONE NOT ABLE TO SHOW ANY FEELINGS TOWARDS OTHERS BECAUSE OF A BROKENHEART. A LOT OF TIMES WE ARE UNAWARE THAT THERE ARE OTHERS OUT THERE EXPERIENCING THE SAME IN LOVE AND LIFE. THIS POEM FOR ME HAS MEANT FREEDOM -TO BREAK AWAY FROM THESE SHACKLES OF SORROW. THANX
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Blossomawwwwww it's rele touching and well written
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leenaykai liky he he he he i give u a 8 out of 10
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JolettaI LOVE THIS POEM! i tried it at last years speech and i ended up crying:P it just reminds me of how me and my boyfriend were:P gotta love this poem!
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GregMy wife want more from me that I seem to be able to give. I strongly identified with the robot.
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justineeverybody will find love one day but no one should stop trying to find it even when you feel like there is nobody out there you shouldnt give up. there is somone out there for everyone all you have to do is wait for them to come.
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LaurenThat was so touching, loving, and heart-breaking! I loved it!
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JaineI really like this poem. It transmits the idea that it doesn't matter who you are, sooner or later one is going to feel love. It also shows the significance of being in a relationship in which both sides love each other.
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shirleyWhat an insight into human nature; men are from Mars, Women from Venus! If you can write about that facade that men have, then you can fix it! It's a great work with words! It looks right into my soul and puts my thoughts into words. Men, grrrr! Keep touching my heart! shirl
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TammyLoved this poem. Keep writing.
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racheli reli enjoyed that poem it was nice it touched me you gave it a lot of thought and made it good.
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ladylizandraAmazing! I guess i can relate myself to the robot. There are just people who finds it difficult to express themselves and i for one am one of these people.
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brandiethis poem is really really good this person deserves a good pat on the back for such an amazing poem. just keep up the good work on your poems and hopefully one of these days you will have many of poetry books.
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alexisthis is the best!i love it! if i were a perfecional editor i would give it five stars! i love it!
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StacyThis poem describes me to a "T" but I'm a woman. I have been described as cold, heartless, and unemotional and oddly enough I am just the opposite. I just don't show feelings and emotions like the rest of the world. I could absolutely relate to this and I have probably written a few poems myslef that are similar to this one! Great job! Love your writing style.
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HOLLIEDeeply touching!
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RochelleI absolutely love this poem. I think Micheal Mack can write really well!
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cateheartfelt. and it is true that love has many faces that we all don't understand. subdued love is perhaps the sweetest. To me.
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Ce-CeThat was b-e-autiful!
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felishai love the fact that you put yourself in the robots point of you.
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Taylori was touched by your poem. It was just what i needed to hear. It shows that even the most solid people can still have feelings. Even though he was made out of steel he had a little trickl in his eye which was love. And everyone can have love all they need is a little push.
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Hollythis poem was amazing iv shown everybody my teachers, friends, mum, gran. i think anyone who is in love or out of love will proper enjoy this poem.
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JaredVery well written, this gets my vote.
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tracyabsolutely brilliant. loved it
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caitlyni know how this feels i to cannot express my emotions either that is why i writesad and depressing poems
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CarolineI loved this poem. It appealed to me because I am like the robot in that I may have strong feelings but I can never get them out or across to people.
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rubyi love the poem
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sallyi really enjoyed reading this and trying to feel what u the robot was feeling and can show that love is out there even if its harder for some to react or understand themselves.
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ShalinaThis poem is awesome! I give it a 9 on a scale of 1-10. Thanks
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lugeniabeautiful! no other word needed
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vhiaI loved this poem, it was so touching but a sadness lingered throughout the whole thing and i felt sorry for the character the whole time. It's hard getting through to someone who finds it difficult to open up, speak their feelings and show emotion in the critical times. APPLAUSE! :)
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George j.A wonderful poem about a woman who can not find love in mere mortals but learns to love her robot who cannot share the emotions from him that she expects. Some times life's realities are out of reach of our expectations. This is a rare love poem with a vital message woven into it.
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mykalathis poem was HOT!
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AllyI really liked this poem, it reminds me of this guy im with who i get mad at for this exact reason, i think i understand now. Thanks alyssa :-D
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Ricki would like to thank whoever wrote this poem. it has given me hope to a second chance with my wife. I screwed up bad and I need to let her know that I truley am sorry, and I can only hope this touches her as much as it did me.
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AmberI wasn't sure whether to read it or not do to the title but that's what caught my attention and it's very appropriate in my opinion. Something else i'd like to say is that I find it hard for me to right in rhyme, it's something that i have to strain for and it's hard for me to get the message and the feeling out when i do so but this piece has done it so eloquently that it still lets you feel and leave you in anticipation of what will happen. It makes you want more and I love that.
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natashai give this poem a 100 it was great amazing i loved it it was so touching and real i felt like if i was in his shoes
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Farah K lvr poetI cannot express to you how I felt about this beautiful poem. I am also a writer and I have never come across a poem like this. I cried while reading with love and serenity. My heart is slowly mending thanks to your poem.
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TonyVery good and a simple form. You also cast a pall on the reader as the poem progresses to it's surprising end.
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MikeMike, Your poem was so apt! In some ways, although me and my girl (I wish she was my girl!) are not engaged or married I think the characters sum us up well!
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KelliI really do love this poem. loved the rhymes and made me think about which part i might play out of the two. two thumbs up. Love it sooo much
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angieyou have my vote 100% on this one you are a good writer keep up the good work.
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JaKeciaI voted for this poem because I can relate to it. I'm constantly being told and I'll be the first one to admit that I don't express myself very well verbally and a lot of what I feel is left unsaid. I've gone through things and I've held things in for so long that I don't quite know how to put my feelings into words anymore. Anyway, that's why I voted for the poem. I can simply relate.
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AliciaI found this poem very touching. And then when I got to the end. I was like wow That was the same role with me but in this case I'm the woman. Men should take note of this. Lot's of husbands I think fall in that
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PhillipI have to admit this guy is blessed with the art of playing with words. He makes you feel like his diary when you read his poems. we have so much to learn from his poems. It is simply beatiful,if only i could describe "Beautiful"
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Jessicathis poem was really stunning it touched me.
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ChristinaThis poem is genuious. great job
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EricaTHIS WAS A EXCELLENT POEM. I REALLY LIKE IT BECAUSE I CAN RELATE TO IT. IM AM OFTEN MISTAKEN AS COLD BECAUSE I DON'T HOW TO SHOW MY EMOTIONS.
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KewashahI love this poem because that robot sounds so much like me. Being a woman it is expected of me to show emotions and even though sometimes I really want to I can't. To me emotions lead to vulnerability and that lead to people taking advantage. This poem kind of makes me feel like I am not alone. Thank you for writing it.
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ShereeThis poem touched me deeply. And I have shared it with all my friends with credit to the author Michael Mack.
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aracellyi really like your poem i always like to read poems and write them
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samanthaThat robot was me.
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bradyTHis is a geat poem. THanks ofr helping get my girlfriend back
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Bunmithis poem was beautiful, Michael Mack is a genius
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savanahwow
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AlishaTHIS POEM REALLY TOUCHED ME BECAUSE I'M A FEMALE BUT I'M VERY SELF-ABSORBED AND TEND TO BOTTLE UP MY FEELINGS AND NOT SHOW EMOTION. TRUTHFULLY I'M SINCERE AND SENSITIVE BUT I CAN COME ACROSS APATHETIC BECASUE OF MY NONCHALANT ATTITUDE. I GUESS OVER THE YEARS I'VE BEEN SCARRED AND LET DOWN AFTER EXPRESSING MY FEELINGS TO SOMEONE THAT I'VE BECAME INSECURE IN THAT AREA. I'M FULL OF LOVE AND AFTER READING THIS POEM I'M GOING TO THE MALL AND BUYING MY HUSBAND A GIFT FOR HIS PATIENCE AND LOYALTY. THANKS FOR THIS POEM. I FEEL LIKE SOMEONE TRULY UNDERSTANDS. :)
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vanessanothing could express what every person goes through in life when love is involved more. very deep and true thank you for sharing it.
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adrianI like the way it was written.
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SashaThis poem is by far the best I've ever read. It was indeed touching,something that everyone could relate to.
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GloriaVery well done, thx.
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chezthat was rly sad - a bit like me som times - well done
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BrittanyI really liked this poem because it is really touching and comes across to me as it being how someone felt
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FeliciaWow, this is a beautiful poem. I see it as a love story put into a few word's with somuch meaning. and when reading this poem, I feel that to many of us play out to be that same robot later in life after giving up on love.
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RebeccaPoem ws very good,
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GlynnI think for what it is worth your poem had such depth and feeling and made me reflect just a little about the past
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PatriciaThat was awesome. It was heart-felt and real. I feel the maid's pain.
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CaityI Loved the way you kept to the topic there, and how well you explained the emotions felt. ^_^ Thanks.
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CarrieThis was a great poem. If you have had a relationship like this it is very fitting indeed. Thanks to the author who put it in words.
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AprilI love the poem. It touches me, because, I, too, felt that pain before.
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NomndeniI am a writer and this poem really touched my heart. It is written in a very simple and passionate way.
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Tinaawwww! this is a great poem. i don't personally relate to it, but it touched me. keep up the good work.
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dannyGreat poem. keep it up!
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criseldanice job youre great :-)
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Laurentwow . ive never heard something that lifelike to myself in situations when ive been told i have no emotion in relationships. it almost made me cry.
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Paigei thought this poem was really good. Its one of my many favourites. Its very good and made me feel what the charactors felt. On a scale of 1 to ten i give this poem a 10!
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MichelleI have tears in my eyes as my heart weeps, I identify with this poem from a womens point of view. I am in love with a man who says he loves me yet seldom shows his senitivity. I have searched for the right words to say to him and started to look online for inspiration. I have to send it in e-mail or letter form because he will not sit to hear anything 'mushy'. I have seen his face change when he reads my notes, and I knoww that I have reach somewhere deep inside. But Dear Poet, this is the one that speaks volumes to me and I am sure to him after he read it. thank you.
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FatimaWonderful poem
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lisaAwesome poem!
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adaGREAT DRAMATIC POEMS i LOVE IT
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deeThis poem is fantastic, and I can so relate to, I have recently met a man who is just like this robot, I know he has deep feelings and wish I could help strip his armour of steel.
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LamontThat was deep!
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AmethystIm definitely a fan of yours. Your an amazing writer and it really shows in this poem. Keep doing what your doing
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RolandI give it a 10, it was somewhat as touching if not more than pinnochio.
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JanI think this poem is very niclely written and although it is very good these types of poems are commenly used in all kind of love i am very impressed about this poem Thanks
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BrittanyThis is a wonderful poem! You are a great writer and you should deffinately stick with it. This is by far one of the best poems iv'e ever read. Great work! you should publish it! :)
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R'RielleTHIS IS A GREAT POEM! I LOVED IT
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vanessathat was one of the most insperational poem i have read in along tyme. it's good to knoe that there are others out there that are willing to express there emotions. even better when your good at it. it was awsome.
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moiramaytouching funny and very interesting
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kimberlyI love the poem so much. it has alot of meaning. i am only 12 and may not know wut love is yet but the auther must of had alot of love when her or she made this poem. keep on makin poems so beautiful like this one. it filled the hole in my heart that needed faith . this poem has given me more of a reason to love everyone i see just in case they have no one -kimberly-
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ANNThis poem made me cry tears of joy! So beautiful and well written. It made my heart flutter, because I to, have tried to make people the way I want them to be, but if it's not heartfound, to no avail.
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avieni love this poem. it reallt ouched me because i i feel like i'm in love with a robot.
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nataleeit was great loved it
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silly gooseReminds me of my life - to a degree!
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lindaTHIS IS A VERY TOUCHING POEM, I WAS MOVED. THROUGH LIFE WE GO THROUGH THIS, NOT KNOWING THE WAY WE ARE TOWARDS THE ONE WE LOVE. GREAT POEM!
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feliciaThe poem was so good i almost cried
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JessicaI loved the poem it was like a short story and it touch me. I thought it was phenomenal. I would give this a ten!
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Dylanwow this is one of those ballads where you really have to stop and think about the deep creativity and mind the author must contain after all of Mr. Macks work i have to stop and take a hard glance at who i am as a writer and as a person. breath taking, simply, breath taking
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sueoh my god this is sooo real and so sad why does this have to be so god save us all bless you
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AcaciaTo hear that he had such an outlook like that and to have emotions like that kinda makes me sad, yet I connect to him because I go through life feeling like that everyday and I am yet still a teen. Nearing being an adult I would never want to make someone feel that kind of hate to me. It breaks my heart that someone would feel like that to write such a moving poem like that. Yet I must say this is wonderful work. I admire this kind of work although I am more of the type to write very deep and dark stuff and I hardly ever post or publish a lot of it but still I must say I look up to this person.
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shannonI just thought the poem was very beautifully written.
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skylathats so swwt sounds like my bf he loves me to death like you said in the thingy i write poerty to so keep the faith love your stuff never give up (keep those wise words) lol ~skyla~ tooldes
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Justinyour poem represents me perfectly. i don't show my emotion and no one loves when i can't express what i feel. i actually gave this poem to a girl woh couldn't understand me. we're still friends now.
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stefanyi know exactly how you u feel ive tried so hard to tell people i love them but yet i find that my words somehow entangle within eachother and i stumble but whispers out!
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Rachelthis is one of thhe best poems iever read, something in my life that i know about, LOVE HURTS!
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AprilHEY YOU PROBABLY GET THIS A LOT BUT THE POEM WAS TRUELY GREAT . IT TOUCHED MY HEART BECAUSE I CAN FEEL EXACTLY WHAT YOU ARE GOING THROUGH
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michellethis poem really touched me, i really feel for this man
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Brandythis is a really good poem! its touching
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MeganI liked your poem. I would have been proud of it if I had written it. The rhythm was very flowing. (maybe too much. ) Anyways, it was a really nice poem. Thanks
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mariayou cant say you lived unless you open up that medal heart to bear its soft core then your cold tear of grease will be no more
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Brittneythis poem was so sweet and relatable! it is the prettiest poem i have read in a while i am glade i hade the oppertunity to read this and share it with my boyfriend! thanks alot this really brightened my day today! Brittney (yogi)
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emmaamazing. sensational. . and deeply moving. total empathy with the robot.
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kellithat poem was really good wow i've never read anything so attaching right when i started reading it i couldnt stop no matter how long it was you have a true talent thank you for giving me the pleasure to read your work
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brandythis poem is really good it reminds me of this guy that ive been seeing off and on for almost 4 years
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KristaI absolutely love this poem. It describes so much that happens today and every day. It's so sad how people can identify with something so common as a poem.
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kalihi michael. im just here to say that u have a real talent and you need to keep up the awesome work!this poem almost made me cry for i like my best friend jeremy, but he'll never know it for he likes other girls. hopefully he'll see this poem and i can tell him. i cant really express my feelings well and result in him thinking im heartless or something. but ur poems keep me happy and u should be proud.
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lodaniathis is a very deep feeling and thinking poem i would like to hear a lot more from this authour. lj
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MaureenREALLY NICE; IT'S HARD WHEN A PERSON CAN'T OPEN UP
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tacasheiai loved your poem. i was moved by so much i'm so lost with word's to say boi your poem took my breath away. but let me in with dis "never fall in love to fast becasues as quickly as it come's into your life it can quickly become your past. "
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AnthonyMan, awesome poem! Everything rhymnes and fits perfectly with the entire flow. I liked the simplicity and the idea your trying to portray behind it because it kinda reminds me of me. hoping to see more of your work.
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kassiethis was a really good one. one of the best so far u know. keep on doin wat ur doin.
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VickyI like this poem because even tho i'm female, and reasonably young, I can still relate to it. I have jus recently split up from a bf who refused to talk, and listen. He wouldn't discuss things with me and wouldn't engage in meaningful conversation. This poem highlights both sides of the 'argument'. And has made me feel I can see it from his side. I think it's a brilliant poem.
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JenniferIt was rather long but the twist was good. I love being suprised at the end.
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JulianaIt is beatiful. I think there are too many ppl that have the love reight by there side and just cant see it.
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kaliomg i love that poem!it was really beautiful and i just loved the way it rhymed and was put together. these other people are saying this is one of their favorites. well this IS my favorite poem. Michael, you are talented. what are you doing posting this on a site? go out in the world and write a book and become rich and famous!this reminds me of my best friend jeremy who cant admit his feelings. ill have to reccomend this to him.
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Ashesthis poem is so cute
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shannonits a sad but true poem. but i think that you cant be all that much of a robot if you can write that kind of poem. i think its a great poem.
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StacyHit Home
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Danielbeautiful poem. good job
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Robini loved this peom. it is so real. i mean some people are like that. i vote high on this poem. ~Robin~
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SierraWOW! I wsa not expecting the ending but it's and amazing poem!
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KellyOne word for this poem AWESOME! You really touched my heart greatly.
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Lourdeswow, this poem almost made me cry. It's so touching and yet, it saddens me. A beautiful heart-felt lyric set.
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MayraTHIS POEM WAS GREAT KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK
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SummerThat was beautiful I hope you can get her back and become human once more that robot side must have left because a machine can't write this beautifully.
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NinaIt is so sad and lovely. I love it. ^^
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MarkDeep and full of symbolism, with a perfect moving twist. The best poem ever! And I've read so many.
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MatthewIt's great. Sometimes it's hard for me to open up and let people know that I have feelings for them. I can really relate.
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AmandaI really like this poem. it kinda confused me like in the middle. but then at the end I got what it was saying. it's actually kind of sad tho. but it's really good and I like it
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DaniYour poem really inspired me to show how i feel. I never really thought how much it would hurt others. Thank you and keep up the good work!
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JessieIt was beautiful, emotional. You can feel and understand watch the story unfold as you read. This is a great poem.
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zachI agree with you. Love is different for each persona and each relationship. I have met some people that are not cold and unable to feel, they just do not know how. I just look deep into thier eyes and watch, and remember that all humans do it, some just do not know how to express it!
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SarahWow. This is absolutely stunning. I've yet to see a poem like this. I have a fascination with robots, so of course I'd look at it. You took the cake and ate it too, my friend.
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ConcettaThis poem is simply amazing.
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Sarahi loved the poem i understood the feelings it told a sort of storey
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jazzmineit was nice
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ranaawesome. wat is said cant b said in a better way than this
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VenessaIt has been quite some time, since I have heard such a testimony that touched me in a way such as this. I once was able to express my emotions in a way that simply my words would make others sob, and wonder in amazement how I could do so. I, myself have become a robot because not only am I unable now to express myself through poetry and sonnets, as before, I cannot in emotionally in relationships as well. I too, lost a love for that reason and I can relate to your poem like you were speaking my life. It must have been painful, but it is beautiful! It lingers!
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SvenI really liked how this poem flowed, much like a story. Many poems are repetitve but this one drew me in and showed me a part of human I rarely see. Thanx for this poem and continue writing. You obviously have a gift. Out of loss comes a gain, which in your case is writing
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wandaI think this was a great poem. It truly reflects how some people express their emotions. Sometimes you look at them. See a person standing in front of you, but you get the response of something electronic.
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TrinashaI am a poet and that was really good I like how you kept the reader at the edge or your words and the ending was great
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sheilaexcellent poem thanks
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DENISHALOVE THIS HAVENT SEEN THIS REAL AND GOOD IN A LONG TIME. 10 STARS
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JimmarThe poem is very good. Well explained eventhough it is long but the deeper mean leaves behind. To the poet of that poem i congrats u. I hope that you can wrote more poems.
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Heatherexcellent.
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GeorgiaQuite profound. Beautifully written. Struck a familiar chord.
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yutit was good
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VinskaThis is the most touching poem I ever read. Flash back to my personal experience fall in love with someone like the robot character, the feeling is still there, jush wish he knows about it. hope he could transform to be a real man one day.
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BrittanyThat was good. It was sad, but good.
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joyi like your work.
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Lainai loved this poem. I understood it and it touched me.
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rebecaIt is a very good poem and it shows lots of emotion
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CheyenneThis poem is REALLY well written. it brought tears to my eyes. you are an insperational writer. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK
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Ashleywow! You definetly have talent. Your poem is great1
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amandai really enjoyed this poem. it brought a tear to my eye, as I am dealing with a robot of my own although I refer to him as kierkegaard.
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Mrwow! this poem was great,it made think about expressing my feelings when needed. THANKS MIKE
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TierraI thought your poem was really cool. I was really moved by it.
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WAYNEThe feelings expressed by the husband here is so like men in general. We have that cold, calculating logic (cold steel) that enables to function as men but so often, fails us when we enter into personal relationships. We allow our logic etc. , to define our feelings. The poem seems to make me address that cold fact and doing so, I have to, at least, try to change my nature. This poem speaks to me and I like it!
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SteelMy first visit to this forum and the first poem I read. was me. It sent such tingling, rushing emotion through me that I felt a wetness in my eye. I loved the poem and hope you do continue writing them as I will continue reading them. Thanks
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KimWow, amazing poem! Superbly written. Unfortunately I can relate, to both sides it seems. Keep up the excellent work!
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billy chickyo u've got some talent there buddy
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GilbertDeep explanation of emotions to often held in check by pride or other reasons. I love the way this flowed from top to bottom and keeps the readers attention.
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ckayYour poem made me cry. It was very touching. Thank you.
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KhristaThis was really wonderful, I completely related to it. It is now one of my very favorites!
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BrandiI loved this poem. it really hit home for me. it's awesome
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DachelineThis Poem was very buetiful. I mean, I t really made me think. Keep up the good work.
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ashleyI loved this poem. It was sad but truthful and shows how people can hurt eachother by expecting to much. Especially when those two people are in love with one another. Great Great Poem!
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Christinait really touched me because i used to be cold towards everyone until i found my boyfriend. he saw thought the cold exterior to a beautiful fun-loving caring girl and for opening me up i thank him for that.
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RoseThat poem was awesome reminded me of my past. was Rhyming. Realistic. etc. I think that's one of my favorite poems now. :)
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SashaI love the poem, it made my heart tremble.
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RhiannonSimply Lovely!
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chrisdude ur poem was bootyfool dam howd u get so good?! hey man keep up da good work u f'en bad! peace
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JUDYWOW. yOU'RE POEM WAS REALLY GOOD. IT TOUCHED ME A LOT. IT'S AMAZING HOW YOU CAN WRITE SOMETHING THAT CAN REALLY TOUCH A PERSON'S HEART AND FEEELING THAT THEY CAN'T EXPLAIN. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK
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KaylaIt was simply beauitful, nothing more could be said:O)
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MARYYOUR POEM WAS GREAT THANX FOR SHARING IT WITH ME
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johnfeeling love and to show it is a hard thing for me to do the robot reminds me of what i'v lost and gaind over my short life to know the robots pain of not showing love for those that need to see it
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ashleighthis was a good poem. it was sad that a robot just wanted love and who could not just because he was a robot.
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NataliBloody Fantastic!
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Nohemiwow i am totally speechles. i'm crying right now this poem was very well writen and to the author keep up the great work!this poem is my favorite now i love it!
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stevethat was a great poem and i really got into it and felt it.
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DiAnneThank you for your courage to share this and for the encouragement it brought me as I wish my robot would see.
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geraldyneTHIS WAS VERY TOUCHIE POEM. YOU HAVE ALOT OF TALENT. DID YOU GOTHROUGH THAT?
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JacobYour poem was an awesome poem
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HunterWow, I'm becoming a huge fan of your poetry and each one blows me away. Each time an atomic explosion of emotion, thanks Mike.
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NimmiSome thing simple. yet so very real. It is a wonderful mement to read the lines. Life in real maybe so sad but it make you feel. This one did make me feel. Thank you. It was a treasure
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SusanExcellant, I can really relate to this
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Charlenegreat poem! so sweet
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ChelseeThis poem was deffinatly put together and cunstructed buetifully . How ever you are keep writting . your great in my book .
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Rhiqua Maeoh my god, i'm actually touch by this poem, i almost cried. the poem is fat!
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alisonthis poem touched me more than any poem i have ever read. you are a very inspiring writer. i congradulate you! amazing job!
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gabyit was really good, i liked it a lot! good job
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KRI'm a fan of your poetry, as you put as much emphasis on rhyme and meter as you do in a lesson learned, the hardship of life, and the fact that we are all ultimately - human. Even this robot.
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CeinwenBeautiful. Thats all I need to say about the poem.
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HelenThis poem is not only very touching, and unique. it is very worthwhile. Thank you ~ It was a pleasure to find it, and enjoy it!
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AllyThis Poem really pulled at my heart strings. when my boyfriend and i have an argument i often call him a robot. no longer will i do this! you write so well, please keep writing and inspiring.
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Kristythat poem gave such insight my first love which i recently broke up with didn't know how to show his feelings and it hurt so i called it off. i now know i made a mistake
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rebeccaHi I was most impressed. What a fab poem. I am sending it to a friend and sending a copy to my partner whotoo has some difficulty expressing his emotions. The poem made me laugh and smile. well done!
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heidithat was beautiful! it kinda reminds me of myself!
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joywhat a nice poem. it really touches one heart. very wonderful!
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yuelleure terms were remarkable! i could relate with each thoughts, more than it was created by mind. it was soething deeply announced by ur soul. ur work ul inspire more readers w/ their experiences
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ShannonI love this poem. It is a description of my current relationship. I am trying to break through the wall of steal of a very special man in my life. I have been trying to show this man how much I love and care about him for almost 2 years now. Just about the time I think he is coming to real life, he pulls away.
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ClarissaThis poem is outstanding. It is so touching and moving. I applaud you on your effort and work!
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Margothis was a really nice poem
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Michaelthis poem reminded me of how i used to be, i was known as a cold person to many, until i met a person like me, it showed how i was so i made myself change and now i show emotion at every opportunity. Beautiful poetry
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ChrisWOW! The experience I felt when reading this grasped my breath and emptied me of all despair. In such words you have found a way to explain what it is like to create a casing of protection from pain or any feelings. Although I try my best, your poem is by far the greates I have ever read. It encompasses such great artistic virtues its unbelievable. Thank you!
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jenniferThis poem gave me chills
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JenWOW! This poem really touched me, it's also written astonishingly well. good job!
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BridgThis poem was absolutely amazing and it greatly touched my heart! You did such a wonderful job with this writing!
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jahI really was touched by this poem. I guess it hit home because i would consider myself the robot. it was excellently worded and inspiring
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DaniOh! I do love a poem that inspires me to be a better writer. one thing I do not understand. it's hard for me to envision you as that Robot! You obviosuly know how you share your emotions. through poetry even! My heart goes out to you. ! Good luck with everything!
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CHRISWOW!
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beccai really liked this poem because i can relate to what it is saying!
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LisaSadly, I came across your poem far too late. My cardboard cut out of a man has left and now I know his love was great. If this drama queen could turn back time she would have realized what was on his mind. This was a lesson I had to learn, now I search for Robots, I will leave no stone unturned! ( Take time to heal and do not fear another MRS. Robot will soon be there)
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DI'm at lose for words. I love your poem.
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AmyThank you for reminding me of the inability to express love freely rather than the lack of desire to. If I choose to forget, I may lose somebody very special to me, the love of my life. Thank you, he is worth it.
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KATTTLoved it!
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LizI don't know much about poems but this one really got me! I loved it! And I thought it's a bit like a sad fairy tale. the romance of a robot:D!
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TimA pleasure to read, both in syntactical structure and content. I am not often moved by other people's words but you caught what is to me the art of poetry; You expressed so much more than the story you wrote.
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MeenaBeautifully written. Expressions of countless heart's emotions. However, it does not end there. this poem my dear Michael, is jsut the begining. Continue the journey. I would love to read it all.
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lizthis poem is so great. i liked it a lot. writing is very good. i guess it will touch many more robots out there.
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RyanI believe that your poem is very indepth and well plotted. i do believe it was more of a story than a poem, but never the less it was spectacular. Well written and you ave my congratulations. I hope that you continue to bless us by posting your amazing creations. Keep writting and take care
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daisyi like this. thanks for writting this. it is really good.
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Lacihey, i loved it. it described something that happens alot with many ppl and they never really realize it. keep writing ur great
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WillWhat a great poem. How else can you put it. just wonderful. Thanx Michael!
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stacyexcellent poet. I loved this poem. very creative
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SillyYou made a 240lb 6' guy cry when he read that! I have been your "Robot" for the past 6. 5 years. Not a tough guy, just the Robot you speak of. My family was never "touchy feely" and therefore neithor was I. I loved her with all my heart, my "programmation" go in the way. :( THANX! I see I am not alone!
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axelPraise 2 u my good man for putting into beutiful words how so many of us feel,including me. u are an inspiration to us all
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crysWhat else can i say, except that only a real man could admit to such things. For once i'm speachless.
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AlinnWow.
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TammyI really liked your poem. It was really touching:)
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AVery sad poem. It was nicely written.
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tracei loved it. it describes me and my ex boyfriend becuz i could never share what i felt or what was wrong and he got tired of it and left me so i know how u feel
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ShazYour poem brought a tear to me, it was a reminder of my ex-husband. Very well written !
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WinGreat poem, it struck me as to how similar I often feel. Like a robot.
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TinyThis poem was a great poem, it showed that she loved him in return but he at the time he felt different, people should take this poem to heart and realize that because you are scared or because you don't want them to know, you must express yourself, or down the line you may be caught in the same situation. I know I have been in the very same situation, and I do regret my decision but that is soemthing I will live with. act for today not tommorow!
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annethe robot was no other than me
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Lindseygreat great i like this poem alot!
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IDAIT IS A GREAT POEM. REALLY TOUCHES THE HEART.
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SandiThis was great. I too am separating from what I thought was my "robot" husband! I am e-mailing to him to try and build some bridges. Feelings matter but this expresses the fact that it does not come naturally to everyone. Thank you M
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LaceWOW!
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RobinRight on! I hope other people who are experiencing this will read it. I found great comfort and some understanding in my life. I now know that it wasn't me who was being rejected.
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JefreyI can't believe i am saying this but i loved it,heyMack you rule.
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AnnetteI loved your poem M.M., it hit my heart more than any poem I read today. I am sad to say I am "the" woman in your poem and I am in the process of leaving my robot husband. It's very touching and very sad. What happens to the robot after she leaves? Should she stay? They are so different these two characters and you've depicted them well. thankyou.
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britneyi love your poem. it make me think of my ex boyfriend and how much i miss him.. i t makes me want to cry.
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GailAlas - it truly expresses the pain the robot feels at not being able to express himself, and the pain that I (the wife of the robot)feel, knowing that he has a rich soul that cannot express itself. The pain he (the robot) feels hurts us too! I am truly moved by this poem that I unexpectedly came upon.
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ColinLoved it. I think we all need to appreciate that not everyone can be as openly emotional as others. The poem was well written.
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firecherryI really enjoyed that one a lot thank you for sharing
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JenniferThis poem is amazing, and I am going to read it to my class if I can ever get it translated to Spanish.
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DARCYI LIKE IT I LIKE IT I LIKE IT I LIKE IT ..=D I EVEN READED IT THREE TIMES.HEHE
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emilyIT WAS A GOOD POEM THAT U WROTE I HAD REALLY LIKE IT.
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RebeccaThe words of Brilliant, beautiful, wonderfull and awesome. Falls short of the art you had shared with the world. Your skills as a writer. Sould not go unlooked. Way to Go!
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adami dint really know what it was about this poem that struck me as great. i guess it gave insight into an aspect thats very rarely touched upon, sad love. i just enjoyed reading it. thanks
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MaryThis poem was so beautiful, thank you. You don't know how much this touched me.
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VirgoAmazing.Very very well written.
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Kendleyour poem is lovely, and it put chills through my body
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NicoleThis one made me cry, so true, so real. I like it.
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LisaI loved your poem. It, like "The Dummy", showed people making friends with material items(A dummy, and a Robot). I like the way you use adjectives and exelent verb use. Keep up the good work Mr. Mack!
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Zindythis is very inspirational. thank you for sharing it.
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Kltuc75very beautiful
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BlancaI think this poem was great! to share your thoughts so creativly through your poetry is very inspirational to me, because one day I hope to be a great poet, and catch a persons attention as you caught mine. Continue to write because your blessed with the talent of poetry..
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ShehraSo moving and so deep. I relate to it.I love it!. 10/10
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VickyMy boyfriend of two years is a fireman. Talk about a cold robotic type person. He has seen and felt so much pain due to his job that when he comes home to me there is very little left of him to lend to me. This poem describes him to the T! I am glad I read it.
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Carlinathis poem is wonderful. when i read it i got chills running down my spine, you have a true talent!
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Parisit gives other "robots" the inspiration to give thier love more freely and express thier emotions more to thier significant other
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CarlosThis was the best poem I have ever read. I read it over and over. It's just excellent and beautiful. I'm going to share it with all my friends so they can read your poem too. I know they are all gonna love it.
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SueAmazing..
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AngelThere is so much emotion that u knew was there. Time is were we learn. Sometimes to late! I enjoyed your poem..
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JadeWow, I've never read anything like it, it bueatiful and deep.
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FeleciaThis poem is simply beautiful. I am hoping I can read more by this amazing poet.
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omerthis si just a beautiful poem and not more then that
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BelindaI've read a lot of poems here today. None of which spoke to me the way yours did. I've tried to write you several different commments and ended up deleting them all. I'm speechless. And amazed. Truly beautiful.
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GarryI can really relate to this poem. I thank you Michael, for opening others eyes to what we cannot do.
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ShawnThis poem has changed me. I used to be like that with my friends who thought more of me then just friends. Thank you
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ShineOnHelps me to understand a couple of people I am close to. I am so sorry for what happened to you, and it is obvious that some "robots" feel very deeply even though it is so hard to show it. God bless and keep writing.
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NaseerNicely thought.
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FelixThat robot is me, also. Hit me right in the heart.
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LaraAs a fellow poet, I just wanted to let you know how touched I was by this particular work. I feel your pain and wish you much love and happiness in the future. This is a very personal poem, thank you for sharing it.
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JuanX-cellent divergence!
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LucyI stole your poem for my drama homework. Thanks! It's gonna be great
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Gandalfbreathless, no words come to mouth Mr. Mack is truly an amazing poet
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JustusSo beautiful and insightful,I'm sure it will help me a lot in my relationship
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HilaryI'm not really into poems but this one really grabbed my attention. The poem is ever sad, but ever so beuatiful. But don't give up hope robot theres other fish in the sea. . . ;)
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GLITTRANGELThis is a very well written poem and Mr. Mack is very talented. Beautiful!
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ChrisThis poem just about made me cry! Awsome stuff!
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DancyOdd enough this is me.so many broken hearts for others to see. I've lost beautiful loves just as the one described above.I tried to say "love" before but my heart seems like a closing door.Please don't think of me less, for I yearn to be the rest..
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DaroneI can relate, for this is me.
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Ja'Quadathis poem was very moving and i could tell that he really put alot of effort in to it. he is a wonderful poet and his aptitude will higher is altitude.
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BaybeYour poem "Robot" was great, It was so real.but yet, the robot was such a great personification..I loved it, but I feel for you.And please accept my sympathy.Keep writing your beautiful words..
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Magdalenathis was a great poem. it touched me very deeply. you have an amazing talent! i hope to hear more of your poems
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Lizzie*smile* You have an amazing wife. Thanks for sharing a part of you. Poems like that are what dreams are made of.
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jakerbobWow. You did a great job on this poem. It's truly some great stuff- copyright and publish this
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AngelaAbsolutely beautiful. 'Nuf said.
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keishathis poem touched my heart, it was a great poem & i hope u have the best of luck in ur future poems
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AlejandraI love it it's so beatuiful and i know how it feels
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maidarabeautiful
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TranaeI love this poem just keep doing what you do and I think it is very passionate.
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bobbyI could feel the realism of a past romance went bad
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MATTGREAT STUFF, I AM SO TRUELY SORRY BUT I UNDERSTAND MY LAST GIRLFRIEND DESTOYED ME FOR I WAS TOO NICE. i ALMOST SENT THIS TO HER.
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crazidazyThat is sooooo sad. I'm so sorry. I've done the exact same thing, to one of my former boyfriends. Only, I didn't walk away. However, I regret it considerably. I hate that for you. =(
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Amberit was a very passionate poem
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Margretheso good that poem!! I recognized myself and felt bad for all the ones I've hurt...
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MarisolOMG This was such a wonderful poem..I loved it...Sounded more or less like my life...Great Job!!!!
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IrmieI couldn't help but cry when I read this poem.
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kati liked this poem because i am also that robot and you have managed to capture what i feel without making it sound stupid
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KathleenThis is poignant with a touch of realism. IT moved me, greatly for it's honesty.
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KathySo beautiful that we know from the beginning of our limitations and are innocent when the truth hits us to finally accept the reality..
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BrianaI am speechless, this is such a beautiful poem.
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DAWNSadly enough I can relate to this poem, It is beautiful
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BethI like!!Brilliant!!
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MariaThought Provoking and very moving.
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tamibeautiful!
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Tony10 out of 10! Sums of my situation entirely. Thank you and God bless. Cheers.
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HollyThis poem was so beautifully written and very touching.
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hollythat made me cry.
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amythis poem gave me chills at the end when it was discovered the robot was him and he was being that way with his wife. i think that it struck a chord because i was once with a robot. it tugged my heart strings.
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lenorevery moving
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LizWell done, Michael! I recognize my fiance' in much of this. I've printed it out to show to him. Thanks!
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melenaplease write some more poems michael mack you´re great
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JessicaThis took my breath away by the end of the poem. I've fallen in love with a certain "robot" before, and it's heart-wrenching. I know he loves me, but he can't bring himself to show it. It's like he's been "programmed" to go through life not being able to express his emotions. I can relate to you and this poem so much. Thank you. Oh, and remember that if someone really loves you enough, they'll understand and accept you just the way you are. Hang in there, robot...
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Candymanit was awesome to hear someone pu into words how so many people feel when they dont express their emotions how others anticipate or realize.
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